Preferred Name: Sea
IGN (In-game name): Seagoddess
Age (optional): 22
Discord: @SeaPlays
What are you applying for (lore/event)?:
I can do either, but I may be best suited to lore. I am mainly centered around storytelling with my writing, and building an environment through words—descriptions of locations, people, organizations, etc. I personally do dungeons and dragons as a dungeon master, so I am experienced in giving people a new perspective on a world unfamiliar to them. From my understanding, this server has its own fantasy elements of ghosts and such and is also set in the 80s. The world may be unfamiliar to any new player stepping in, but through scenes and writing, we can help incorporate them into this new world so they can have a better and easier time roleplaying in it.
Why do you want to be a writer for Echoes?:
I mainly want to engage with the server in any way I can. This server is brand new and definitely can become something special. I enjoy role-playing, and I would like to have somewhere to role-play just in general, so anything I can do to help make a place like that for myself and others, I will do it. But for writing specifically? I've been a writer for as long as I can remember. It's a very personal and special art to me. Most places and people do not even acknowledge writing as a skill or as an art, just as its own thing, so it's very nice to see that this server has a dedicated application and place for writers.
How do you think our current writing could be improved?:
Aside from the writing sometimes appearing off-screen, the writing does feel tutorial-ish in the game, which is to be expected. On the forums though the writing does feel a bit rushed, mainly for the lore of Wisteria (Sorry Sqidy). We're not properly introduced into the setting in my personal opinion, just sort of told what it is, and then we skip past it into the main bulk of the story. The hook could be a lot more gripping as well instead of rushed.
The original line of the forum page is; "In the hour of blue, everyone is warned never to step foot into Wisteria Forest. The forest got its name from the abundance of flowers that once made it a proud landmark of the town. But that was before the incidents began." It feels a tad generic. Like any story could open with this.
Personally, here's how I would write it; "Just before the waking hours, they say there is a warning to never step foot into Wisteria Forest. A place once renowned for its peaceful green scenery and named after flowers that would scatter its fields. But this was all before the incidents began." It feels more flowery this way and more gripping, but this is my personal opinion.
A big thing in writing as well is Chekhov's gun. The principle to where if you include something in your writing, it must play an importance. Listing things such as clothing or physical descriptions without a purpose feels very forced and not genuine, such as the description of the psychiatrist. However, this does not apply to things such as descriptions. The entire point of those writings is to describe the character or setting.
Give us a few examples or portfolio of your past works:
Example A: Excerpt from my Dungeons and Dragons game detailing a war. This was a prewritten dialogue for an NPC. 
Semi-warning for these next ones, a tad gorey.
Example B: A character I was playing on the School Roleplay server was about to murder two other characters, but first he had to separate them and lure the other away. His arm was also broken.
Example C: Two character descriptions of the same character.
"Dressed like a 1940s P.I. that stands tall and confident, even in the face of danger is Sam. Sounding like a mid-city accountant or a politician, his voice shifts from silvery with a deep hearty laugh to smoky as he gets more serious or tense. He's reliable, like a good coworker or friend with a deep passion for assisting anyone, or romantically like a fine aging wine."
1a) "Sam Reed stands exactly at 6'1 (185cm), unsurprising given his American heritage. From what we have been told and gathered he is in top physical and mental health. He was given to us well dressed and as requested by the givers, he has been left with most of his items. His chestnut brown hair when drug tested shows traces of nicotine from as early as of 3 weeks or so ago. He also formerly had contacts to make his eyes a slightly deeper shade of blue than his natural lighter variant, and it is unknown why as he has no medical history of needing glasses."
2a) "As he is not a part of our main group of testing, we are unable to provide a clear disposition report. However, with the provided documentation and reports we have made an informal assumption. Mr. Reed has been known to be very crafty and exceptional at investigation due to his background. Not only that, he's also very charismatic, even a leader, but also scales high in empathy while keeping some amount of pragmaticism. With his calm demeanor, it is highly likely he will not cause too much stress in our study group, so he is to be administered with the rest as an outlier."
Example D: (Final one) Location Description with the image provided.
"Agents Living Space", set in JDP HQ
"On the outskirts of the facility lay an open hallway flanked by several security on either end. The hallway was long and set to dim lighting with a plush carpet that declared wealth. Decorations such as vases and tables were placed throughout at certain intervals and even an elevator was set in the middle of the hall. The location was made to look like a rich and lavish hotel suite section, for only the most wealthy of individuals. Labeled above each door, however, were markings and letters that read out under different rooms such as "A-S" or "A-O"."
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